Poll: Would you mind if these were actually implemented?

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 Topic: Ushinawa Region: The Konchū Clan

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  Posted on January 30, 2012 12:02 PM
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danahachai, The Radiant Saint

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What is the Ushinawa Region?
The Ushinawa Region, meaning 'lost region,' is on the brink of being wiped completely of every map. It is located directly on the border of Hanto but remains forever isolated away from outside population. 

*Each paragraph represents a new mission.*

When the player first arrives, they are surrounded by a massive swarm of bees. When it appears to be the end, a mysterious voice calls the bees off. From behind the swarm, a young girl with strawberry blonde hair appears with a concentrated look on her face. As she notices the Captain, her expression changes to a very joyful smile. She introduces herself, claiming her name to be 'Konchū Kiiro.' Her job is as a beekeeper of the clan she hails from. Behind the Captain, another few bees begin to rise. Kiiro informs the Captain that these have been named 'rebel bees'- bees that have not been properly sealed by the Konchū's line of beekeepers. The Captain must now help Kiiro seal the bees correctly. 

After sealing the 'rebel bees,' Kiiro agrees to take the Captain to her village, which is casually hidden by vast orchards. Along the way, Kiiro tells the Captain that the Konchū clan is struggling to keep up with the rising taxes demanded by the Atsu clan. Her clan is small and only provides the finest honey to the Ushinawa region, but it doesn't make enough money to pay for taxes. A short moment later, the Captain's team starts to notice a large amount of abnormally big beehives. Kiiro says that their village is just behind the hives, in which grant a natural protection to the Konchū. A few minutes of walking cautiously throughout the hives brings Kiiro to abruptly notice that they had entered her village. All the houses are shaped as beehives, some noticeably larger than others. Kiiro leads the Captain to possibly the largest hive in the area, joint with other, smaller hives, claiming this to be the Daimyo's quarters. 

Inside, the house is filled with ornament decorations and to the far back a colourful chair, seating an elderly man dressed in dull robes. Kiiro bows before him, instructing the Captain to do the same. The man rises as he notices Kiiro, a frown appearing upon his wrinkled face. He scolds Kiiro, reminding her about the Konchū's rules on strangers. Inviting an outsider without permission is strictly not allowed. Kiiro pleads to the man, naming him 'Grandfather,' shocking the Captain's team. She insists that these strangers can help the Konchū's tax problem as they assisted her in sealing rebel bees. The man returns to his chair, asking the Captain for proof that they can be helpful. 

*Completion of this mission unlocks the character Konchū Kiiro and the villages Tsuin and Kōseki.*

Konchū Kiiro 
80 HP, Assassination

Kiiro is a young girl who was born into the Konchū's line of beekeepers. Her job is to seal rebel bees while keeping the sealed bees healthy and ready to produce honey for trade. Kiiro also grew up quite small and she uses this to her advantage, giving her the ability to swiftly avoid enemy attacks and hit targets in the blink of an eye. Along with this job comes the blessing to summon and command the bees, in which she uses offensively, alongside her handmade twin daggers. Her daggers were made especially for her by her father, the Konchū's previous beekeeper, now talented blacksmith and carpenter. The carvings on the metal are 黄 (yellow) on one dagger and on the other, a 黒 (black) to represent the bees she's been destined to watch. 

Appearance: Kiiro is only 15, has shoulder-length, thin 'strawberry' blonde hair that slightly fans out at the ends and pale green eyes. She wears a one-sleeved white top that just extends past her wrist on her right arm, an intricate pattern delicately designed. On her right arm is a separated sleeve that starts in-between her forearm that too ends  after her wrist. 

Her legs are adorned with oddly sized leggings as the right one stops mid-thigh while the other reaches right down to her ankle. Around her waist is a white skirt that has a gap in the centre, where a black belt stretches across her entire waist. Her daggers are buckled onto the belt, one on her left, the other on her right. Kiiro's boots are also odd, the one on her left leg being knee-height, the other only touching her ankle although both are striped yellow and black. 

Finally, she wears a long necklace with an orange feather and matching earrings, acknowledging her position as beekeeper. 

Skillset

Sting
Cost: random 
Class: ranged, instant
CD: none
Kiiro affects one random enemy with a bleeding affliction dealing 5 damage infinitely, draining 1 random energy and granting her 1 Swarm charge. This affliction stacks.

Kiiro summons a single bee to her aid, using it to sting an enemy and effectively weaken them permanently

Swarm
Cost: intelligence + random
Class: ranged, instant
CD:
Kiiro deals 15 piercing ranged damage to one enemy and 10 to all others. Each Swarm charge increases damage dealt by 5. Removes all Swarm charges.

Kiiro uses all her summoned bees to attack the enemies alongside herself, wielding her twin daggers. 

Hidden Blade
Cost: strength
Class: melee, instant
CD: 1
Kiiro deals 20 melee damage to 1 enemy, affecting them with a bleeding affliction dealing 5 damage each turn for 2 turns. 

Kiiro attacks on her own, swiftly stabbing an enemy with her twin daggers.

Slide
Cost: random
Class: tactic, instant
CD: 4
Makes Kiiro invulnerable for 1 turn. 

Kiiro nimbly avoids an enemy attack.

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So. Let me know what you think about the clan history, character, region in general, storyline etc. Your opinion is super-important to me. ^_^

Thanks for reading! o(^▽^)o
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  Posted on January 30, 2012 2:20 PM
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Demonkings, The Golden Demon of the Darkness

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Not your best character Dana

Here is why

1. Names are too short and simple, you noticed how every character's skills are interesting like Darkened Dawn or Intercept instead of just Block or hide.

2. Sting = Poisonous Darts

The only thing difference is that sting does bleeding while darts do poison. But it is considered average despite the above.

3. Stab

Up, high cost, weak damage. Yuudai has an improved version of stab even without his VI. Sorry but...rework that skill and change its name.
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  Posted on January 30, 2012 2:34 PM
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danahachai, The Radiant Saint

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1. Well, the names were intentionally simple. It's not like I'll be doing that for every character, but that's how it was meant to be.

But you do have a point. I'd be pretty bored with a character with skills like attack, defend, etc.

2. I completely forgot about PD. Originally, the skill drained 1 random energy but I thought that was a bit abusive with no cooldown. I'm not sure what to do with this skill actually.

3. I can change Stab's name and give it a small rework though.

Thanks for your help. ^_^
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  Posted on January 31, 2012 1:28 PM
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they are cute and nice good work Dana-chan
the name's are nice
the skills are good and depend with who are ur chars used as a team
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