Topic: Kazekage By Archy

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  Posted on July 10, 2013 at 11:16 AM
#1
Archy, Prisoner

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did him in 5 minuts or so,
therfore i didnt check his balance and he is not fully done, just test made.
rate and give proper comment in order to help me in his improvement
those whos comments i like ill give thumb up c:< and it includs criticks aswell

  Posted on July 10, 2013 at 12:48 PM
#2
Jin, Swordsman

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The second part of GDS doesn't make sense, though the first should probably require a specific, or even a blood/nin

Now i get it when I read GS, But for it to deal 15 dmg, and have 2 effects, with no cool down, for one blood, is OP.

Yeah, character is just OP
v-Blood & Tears-v
  Posted on July 10, 2013 at 1:20 PM
#3
edwinas5524, The Untouchable Swordsman of the Nobles

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I think its too much explanation for every skill, but overall its not bad and next time make some WoN character with custom art
  Posted on July 10, 2013 at 4:37 PM
#4
RagicanoX, The Black Inferno

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I saw this on N-A, I think I know who you are :P

Anyway cool beans.
  Posted on July 10, 2013 at 6:11 PM
#5
Archy, Prisoner

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Joined: June 28, 2013
RagicanoX wrote:

I saw this on N-A, I think I know who you are :P

Anyway cool beans.

i havent posted it on Na
xD


and i want rates D:<
and more explanation why is char Op
also i hope you dudes get flow between skills
if not then its wrong site to post good chars
  Posted on July 10, 2013 at 7:16 PM
#6
naruto-leaf, Swordsman

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1. Change your wording. (Skill description is all over the place)
2. Golden Dust Summoning should require a red energy.
3. Golden Shower is very OP. The only way a character will deal 30 more damage with a reduced 50% is if that character has been charged, which most character don't have charges and they deal at most 45, 50 damage.
4. Using word as CD instead of cool down might confuse some people into not knowing what that is.
5. Basically speaking right now all his moves required red energy.
Removed for ???
  Posted on July 10, 2013 at 7:46 PM
#7
Ryu_No_Zonbi, The Cloaked Warrior of the Military

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Bored so ill comment on this.

1st skill is fine should clarify the second part no one seems to understand it (neither do I).

2nd skill Golden Shower is OP imo its spammable, low cost, no cd, and almost guarantees you get the bonus 10 damage because of the 50% damage reduction.

3rd skill is "fine" but the 29 annoys me to no ends.

4th skill is op in my opinion for the same reason as Golden Shower.

All in All ill give it a 6/10 would be higher if i actually knew all of what 1st skill does :c.
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  Posted on July 10, 2013 at 8:22 PM
#8
Aexon-, The Untouchable Lackey of the Ancestors

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2nd effect of 1st skill means "for those that dealt less than 30 damage last turn, they will receive 10 damage."
  Posted on July 10, 2013 at 8:57 PM
#9
Archy, Prisoner

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thank you all for comments
but i dont think that you dudes got his flow XD
lololol thanks anyways
  Posted on June 22, 2014 at 10:45 AM
2 thumbs up
#10
saif, The Flaring Inferno

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Archy wrote:

did him in 5 minuts or so,
therfore i didnt check his balance and he is not fully done, just test made.
rate and give proper comment in order to help me in his improvement
those whos comments i like ill give thumb up c:< and it includs criticks aswell


Skills are Intresting, but bit OP , That Golden Wave
  Posted on June 22, 2014 at 10:46 AM
2 thumbs up
#11
saif, The Flaring Inferno

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Rate like 8/10 ;T
  Posted on August 15, 2014 at 10:02 AM
#12
badea1, The Protective Saint of the Ancients

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Everyhing is cool, just a bit too OP
  Posted on August 15, 2014 at 4:19 PM
#13
Rogue-nin, The Flaming Wolf

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Joined: February 17, 2010
Right.

Grammar

I don't mean to be rude, but the reason why some are having problems understanding the skills is because there are quite a few grammar issues. I'm not going to be a pain in the butt and go over them, but that is the first thing that you need to go over in order to improve your character. I'm not judging though.

First skill - I think it's overall well-balanced, with a mixture of original (attack part) and unoriginal (defence part) moves. Gives a bit of sense of Kazekage Gaara, though in that situation, although "painful" to waste two chakra it was worth it for the boost. Can see myself not wasting the chakra for this skill.

Second skill - As nice as it sounds it's overpowered for the sole reason that this one cheap skill can destroy a whole team by itself.

There is no character that can attack more than 30HP after the 50% reduction, obviously ignoring the scenario when Kakashi may have his nin dogs active. Currently, I think, the highest spiker is Kidoumaru. 50: 2= 25. Even he will take the following 10 damage.

Alternative - Increase the chakra cost by one more bloodline and increase the damage so it's worth using it, to let's say 30. That should make it a bit more acceptable.

If you don't want to increase the chakra cost then reduce the amount of damage reduction to 25% (so it's easily calculable by the opponent) and add one, even two turns cooldown. He has plenty of other skills to play with before this one would become usable again.

Third skill - I don't see why you are trying to make a connection between this and the previous skill. If anything, you should make a connection with the fourth skill and either:

- make the fourth only grant DD's for allies.
- make him not receive the DD, as he already has a 29(?)(why complicate the process? Just put 30) limit. Basically, when third skill is active, he can not use the fourth on himself.
- As this skill is invisible, making him not receive the DD would kill the tactic, so therefore instead make the fourth skill cost one extra chakra during this skill. If he wants extra protection when he is already protected, he should pay for it.

Fourth skill - Quite balanced.

Overall it's not bad, but he feels a bit confusing and a pain to use at the moment. Try to make it more clearer and write down his skills maybe a bit less complicated. :)

Good job though. 8/10